Thursday, February 18, 2016

Review of the Great Gatsby - Is this old classic about American history?


The Great Gatsby, by F. Scott Fitzgerald, is the story of a rich man pursuing the woman he has loved since his youth. Jay Gatsby, extravagant and disillusioned by World War I, dreams of recovering desires from his past and employs the help of Nick Carraway, his next door neighbor. However, while the novel appears to be a romantic tragedy, it is packed with a plethora of hidden meanings and symbolism. Matthew Bruccoli suggests The Great Gatsby is about American history, and I believe that, in many ways, that is true, from the setting of the story to the metaphors in the writing.

The early 1920s was a time of disillusionment and excess. After World War I, the new generation was desperate to cope with the traumas of their experiences. This led to a time of corruption, encouraging people to run after their desires without thought to the consequences. An example of this is Gatsby's huge mansion and the manifestations of his wealth. The parties he held on Saturday nights are a good example of the extravagance and waste of the age. Both Nick and Gatsby had fought in World War I, and throughout the story, we see Nick's resulting cynicism and Gatsby's decadence. There is also a clear picture of the industrialism of the age. Parts of the story are set in the Valley of Ashes, which was a long stretch of desolate land created by the dumping of industrial ashes. This was the setting for Wilson and Myrtle's home, creating their dismal mindsets.

World War I also resulted in the decline of the American dream. Before, that dream had been a very pure ideal. It was about discovery and making your own path and creating something for yourself. Now, in a world that was obsessed with consumption, the American dream was simply the pursuit of pleasures, whether it be money, property, or enjoyment. Gatsby's parties and his pursuit of Daisy are an example of this, as are the motives and actions of the other characters in the story. It also represented the dissatisfaction of the age. In the end, no one is able to truly fulfill their greedy desires. Gatsby's dream of finally being with his true love – Daisy – was compared to the old dream of the New World and symbolized by the green light at the end of her dock. He was straining toward things that were already past, groping after dreams that had become deceptive wisps.

This story is also includes how changes in social status played out in the 1920s. There was the aristocracy, old families with old wealth, and now there were people who were making their own fortune, known as the newly rich. With the prohibition, Gatsby and many others were making fortunes through criminal activity and bootlegging. One of the reasons for Daisy's rejection of Gatsby was that he had pursued money in ways that were less than reputable. Families that were from the aristocracy often frowned on the newly rich, suspecting them as bootleggers. The aristocrats were often characterized by subtlety and sense. But they also – like Tom and Daisy Buchanan – had a certain hollowness to them. Throughout the story, Tom, Daisy and Jordan are often conveyed as being dispassionate. However, the newly rich were excessive and extravagant, but they also had heart. Gatsby, for all his flaws, has real passion and feeling throughout the story.

The Great Gatsby also represented the moral decline of the age. Between the activity in Gatsby's mansion and his pursuit of – Daisy – a married woman, we see how the characters put more emphasis on self-gratification than on truth and morality. At the end of the story, Gatsby loses Daisy and Tom loses Myrtle, the woman that he was cheating with. Gatsby, unprotected by his social status and also by his heart, is killed for a crime that he didn't commit, and Daisy, who accidentally committed the crime, is untouched. Nick, after wrapping up Gatsby's affairs, leaves Long Island, searching for a place where the excesses of the age will not affect him.

In the end, this story is about the disillusionment that was rampant in the age. It has a real grounding in history. Through the setting, the feel, and the message of the story, it conveys the history of the 1920s. The age was permeated by the aftermath of World War I, causing the world to change socially and morally. The Great Gatsby is a representation of what happens when we pursue our pleasures and desires over all else. I agree with Matthew Bruccoli's statement. This story not only teaches history, it teaches history in a way that is very tangible and deep.
 

Wednesday, February 17, 2016

Review of the new Star Wars!

Well, I know that this is late, since the Star Wars movie came out weeks and weeks ago. Life happens, though, and I felt like I wanted to mull over the story in my head for a while.

To be perfectly honest...(please don't shoot me) I am not a big fan of Star Wars. I thought that the other movies had poor writers and poor acting. Between those two issues, plus the special affects that were definitely wanting, I just don't enjoy them all that much. The only reason that I wanted to go see the new Star Wars in the first place is because I am a movie-aholic. However, when I watched it, I was very pleasantly surprised. And this is why...

BEWARE OF SPOILERS!

First of all, I feel like the atmosphere and setting of the movie was better in every way. I think that one of the reasons why I didn't like the first movies was because it just didn't seem real to me. It was too far-fetched and abstract and poorly done that it just wouldn't come together in my mind. However, the whole story, the way it was pulled together, put something that was very tangible in my hands. The fights in space, the sandy hell that Rey lives on, the ruins from battles in previous movies...it was all very interesting and full of Easter Eggs. Even the creatures that they brought in were more real because of the way that they were handled.

I think that my favorite part of this movie was the character development. I usually don't like female characters in movies, but I LOVED Rey. The mystery of her past, the smart, hardened shell and sensitive core. I liked how they involved the story of a storm trooper who found that the fear and the death was just too much for him. Unlike from the other movies, these characters took on a life of their own...and thank goodness they weren't whiny! It was also neat how they wove old and new characters together, creating totally new scenarios and emotions to go with.

Darth Vader will always be one of my favorite bad-guys in movie history, but I thought that Kylo Ren was a good antagonist in his place. Like any good antagonist, he had layers, weaknesses, and quirks (that thing where he hits his wounds all the time? It blew my mind!). Of course, there WAS that moment where he took of the mask and you realized that instead of a Tom Hiddleson type, you ended up with one of the most goofy looking men in the universe. Literally. Should I stop?

The plotline itself was probably the weaker part of the story. While I liked how the movie remained true to its history, sometimes I thought that it was a little too loyal to a flawed storyline. I mean, really... How many times are they going to leave a weakness on the outside of their most recent Deathstar. Really? And they are searching for Luke Skywalker? Because.....why? I just didn't think that "He will restore balance to the force" was enough of an explanation. I mean, there wasn't much peace when he was around in the first place. I don't know. It just didn't do it for me.

Other than that, I really loved the twists and turns that the story took, the fight against cowardice, the past, and rejection. Rey discovering that she is able to use the force, Kylo Ren's struggle between the Dark Side and good. I really feel like this movie was Star Wars 2.0. I am very excited for the next one to come out. And while I am disappointed in the choice of actor to play the antagonist, I can't wait to see what role he plays in the end.

Well, this ended up being more of a rant than a review, but I hope that you enjoy it. Thank you for reading this! If you enjoyed the movie, comment below and let me know what you liked about it! If you didn't, I would love to know why!

Friday, August 28, 2015

Writing Prompt #4

You wake up to hear a pounding on the door. When you answer it, nothing is there...except for a letter with a black wax seal. The letter is addressed to you.

Wednesday, August 26, 2015

Go Teen Writers: A Characterization Study on Little Women



Here is a great post on the Teen Writers website about using a physical description to convey who a character is. She uses the story, Little Women, as an example of this and gives you the opportunity to try it yourself. This is a definite must read! Enjoy!

Go Teen Writers: A Characterization Study on Little Women: Jill Williamson is a chocolate loving, daydreaming, creator of kingdoms. She writes weird books for teens in lots of weird genres like, fan...

Sunday, August 23, 2015

Review of the Fantastic Four



I haven't written a review for a movie before, but I thought I'd give it a go! My friend and I went to the new "Fantastic Four" movie this evening. Here are my thoughts on it.

This is a review for people who don't want spoilers! Farther down, I will write another that delves deeper and will contain spoilers. Don't say I didn't warn you.

This is a great movie for people who love super heroes. Each character has their own motivation and agenda, adding something to the story itself. Mankind wants to push its limits, to explore and learn more about this world...and any other that exists. Due to a...complication...four explorers who were visiting an alternate dimension were hurt and imbued with fantastical powers. Some see them as freaks. Others see them as weapons. However, in the end what matters is what they think of themselves. Each of them must overcome their bitterness and learn to use what they have been given to stop an evil that threatens to destroy their world.

Out of one to ten, I would probably give it a five. It is however, a very enjoyable movie.

Now, for those who want a more in-depth review...

WARNING: THIS CONTAINS SPOILERS. If you don't want any, stop reading now!

The movie opens on Career day, where a young boy tells the other students that he wants to be the first person to be teleported. His name, our hero, was Reed. Ridiculed by his classmates, misunderstood by his parents, he only has one friend, Ben. Together, they create a mechanism that can teleport objects. One day, while making an example of his invention at a science fair, a man approaches him with a proposition. And that's where Reed's adventures really begin.

From the standpoint of plot, this movie is about as realistic as any superhero movie, so I'll try to do this unbiased. Reed, along with his new friends, create a machine that will allow them to travel to another dimension. When they prove it is possible, one of the board members of the school hosting them decides to call in NASA. The team decides to go instead, without permission. The journey goes smooth, but while in the alternate dimension they are hurt and given powers. From there, they are in the center of a game of tug-a-war. Their teacher wants them healed. The military wants to use them as weapons. And Victor, a young man who was left behind in the alternate dimension, wants to destroy the world. Only by working together -- and coming to grips with what they are -- can they defeat him.

I thought that the characters were developed decently enough, though I thought that some of their actions were unrealistic. For example, Reed running away from the military plant and leaving his friends behind didn't seem like something he'd do, especially after making a promise to Ben. And it never explained what he was doing while he left. When he finally returned, the others -- with the exception of Ben -- seemed to forgive his treachery immediately. It just didn't seem smooth to me.

The antagonist, Victor, was the part I really had a problem with. We first see him sitting in front of a computer screen, hair uncut, a reject of society. After being convinced by his teacher to help with the project of teleporting, he returns to the school. Now, there are different looks and comments exchanged that point to there being some sort of history between him and the female lead, but it was never clearly explained. When they arrived at the new dimension, he was fascinated by the "energy" on the new planet -- and his actions led to the accident that ensued. He was left behind in that dimension, blessed with powers himself, for over a year.

Later, when the military sent explorers to the new dimension, he re-emerged. They took him back, thinking he was injured. It is then that he reveals his hatred toward the outside world. The world is evil, and he wants to start again with a new one. The energy that has sustained him in that dimension would surely continue to do so. Although his anger was understandable, I didn't understand his complete hatred toward the world. Was it the energy inside him? Was he insane? All unclear.

In the end, he tries to open a sort of portal between worlds that will destroy earth. The four freaks, monsters, must stop him. Separately, Dr. Doom (as Victor calls himself) defeats them. But when they work together as a team they are able to succeed. In the end, they are a team that will use there powers, not for military or political power, but to make a difference.

Like I said, it was a fun movie to watch, but in the realm of plot and character, it was not very well developed.

Also: DON'T WAIT THROUGH THE CREDITS. Everyone does. You know, to see the teaser at the end. It's Marvel, right? Well, my friend and I did, and there wasn't one. Just so you know.

Enjoy your movie watching! Any thoughts on the new movie. Please comment below!

Saturday, August 22, 2015

Writing Prompt #3

You wake up in a small, concrete room that is filling up with water. Your only tools are a screwdriver, a cell phone with no batteries, and an assault rifle. How do you proceed?

Friday, August 21, 2015

Keeping things interesting

Some stories, in order to hold a reader's attention, will be made up of intense event followed by battle scene followed by action. Bam! Bam! Bam! In this society, it is hard to get someone to stop and listen for any length of time. Writers in general often struggle to hold their reader's attention for any length of time. Some solve that problem by having constant suspense. However, that is not always realistic, and some storylines simply won't allow for it. So how do we keep the reader engaged during every scene?

Character. Engaging characters will engage the reader, even when they are not in the middle of a fight. Their reactions, actions, thoughts, emotions, and expressions will draw us in. We want to see their unique outlook. Sound too simple? It's not. It really works. A dull scene with great characters will carry while a great scene with dull characters cannot. This is why it is so important to have 3D characters that come to life in the reader's mind.

Changing emotion. Every scene, intense or not, should contain a change in emotion. If not, it is wasted and should be cut or improved. It is the changes in emotion that really keeps the reader reading. Emotion is the core of story-telling. Maybe the protagonist starts out happy, but by the end of the scene she is troubled and questioning. Anything goes so long as the reader can feel it. I believe that is the essence of good story-telling. Feeling. The more you keep the reader guessing and on their toes, the better. Evoke on them the character's turmoil.

Clear plot. If a chapter feels pointless then it probably is. And that comes from a lack of clear plot. If your plot is clear and the reader knows where you are going, they will follow you through the calmer seas as well as through the storms. Everything should fit into a purpose that the reader can see, whether now or later. Otherwise, you're just wasting space, and the reader is wasting their time.

Hidden information. If done right, an air of mystery is very effective in keeping a reader reading. Whether it is simply an exchange about the past between characters or foreshadowing to some horror in the future, it will intrigue. Keep the reader guessing with unforeseen plot twists and hints of what is to come.

A great example of a story that does this is Wool by Hugh Howey. I am reading it right now, and I would definitely recommend it.



Can you think of anything else? Comment below!

Wednesday, August 19, 2015

Writing Prompt #2

You're all alone on a Saturday night. You walk up to your bedroom and find a hooded man browsing over your journal. He looks up and says, "We've been waiting for you."

Tuesday, August 18, 2015

Go Teen Writers: Editing in Layers: Drawing out Emotion and Tension...

Great post about editing by Stephanie Morrill. Check it out!



Go Teen Writers: Editing in Layers: Drawing out Emotion and Tension...: by Stephanie Morrill Stephanie writes young adult contemporary novels and is the creator of GoTeenWriters.com. Her novels include The Re...

How to self-edit

This, in my opinion, is one of the hardest things for a writer to learn. And yet, self-editing is one of the most crucial part of an author's career since so much time is spent editing. More time is spent working on the second and third draft than on the first draft. The first draft is just getting something on paper whereas editing is crafting and creating. It can be fun...and a pain. But editing sure does take the pressure off your first draft, if you know what I mean.



 I just got done self-editing a novel, and I have learned some things about what to look for.

Content issues. This is by far -- for me -- the hardest part of editing. Looking for flawed characters, troubled plot lines, and things that just don't make sense. Content editing really varies from story to story, and it helps to have an outsider's opinion. My suggestion is after you finish your first draft, put it down for about a month and then read it again. See if the characters are fully developed. Look for holes in the plot. Try to find places where the setting and description could be improved.

Reduce your word count. Your second draft must have a smaller word count than your first draft. The first draft will always come out fluffy, just because that is your exploratory draft. Go in and cut anything and everything that is unnecessary. Make sure that your dialogue tags are not too excessive. Look for words that just clog up the sentence flow. Reading "On Writing" by Stephen King, this was impressed on my mind. This was the equation he used:

First draft - 10% = Second draft

Cutting ten percent will not take away from your story -- if you cut the right things. It will improve it and make it all the more powerful.

Look for continuous themes. Whether we implant it there or not, almost every story ends up with an underlying theme. Sometimes it takes us a long time to notice it, but it is there nonetheless. For example, the novel I just finished was meant to show the devastation that bitterness can cause and the beauty of forgiveness. However, it ended up being much more than that. It now also shows the importance of true sacrifice and the meaning of family. Reading over your first draft, you may notice your own themes. Pursue them and try to strengthen them in the second draft.

REMEMBER: The stories that are most powerful are the ones that have something to say, a lesson to teach.

There are many more aspects of self-editing, but these are the ones that come to mind at the moment. Can you think of any more? Comment below!

And by the way, Inkitt has opened a new Mystery/Thriller contest. Some of those stories are really great; you should check it out. I entered my story, The Forbidden Cellar. I have edited it once again and believe that I have a more powerful piece of writing. If you get a chance, please check it out and tell me what you think! It is found at this link: http://www.inkitt.com/stories/16921

Thanks! :)

Monday, August 17, 2015

Writing Prompt #1

Write a story involving a ninja with an attitude, a break-dancer with a fear of heights, and a talking parrot...

Saturday, August 15, 2015

A Writing Exercise for Creating Setting

One of the hardest parts of writing for me has always been creating setting. It is also a very vital part of writing. Many people don't see it as such a key element...that is until they read a story with poor setting. Good setting creates not only a place but also a feeling, a mood. It interlocks everything together. Although you don't want to overdo setting, you want to intersperse it throughout the story. This is an exercise that I have found very useful in writing setting.

1. Visualize the place. If you want to drop the reader into your setting, you have to be able to drop yourself into it. Take just a few minutes, shut out distractions, close your eyes, and just imagine.

2. Write down the details. Take it one sense at a time. Think about all the things you see in the setting and write them down as fast as you can. Don't use full sentences. Don't worry about grammar or spelling. Just write. Give yourself two minutes, and when the time is up, stop. Then go to the next sense (taste, smell, etc.) and do the same thing. When you are finished, you should have a very good idea of what the place is like.

3. Choose a mood. In one word, write down the mood you want to convey (creepy, suspenseful, calming, etc.). Then look over all the descriptions you wrote and underline the ones that support it. For example, if you are going for creepy, mention the blood-red mushrooms in your description. If suspenseful, describe the sudden silence. If calming, talk about the smell of fresh lavender. Then, just combine those details into a concise and powerful description of the place.

If this tool is used right, it will help to transport your reader into the writing. And that really is the main goal in writing, isn't it?

Have any advice on writing setting? Comment below!

 


Wednesday, August 12, 2015

My Inkitt Stories

Hey all!

Just wanted to let you guys know, I have some writing that you can read for free on the Inkitt site (don't know if that interests anyone or not, but here goes). If you are a writer or reader, I would definitely recommend this site. It is a great place to interact with others and read great stories. They've got just about every genre there. One of my favorite things to do on there is review other people's work. It's a lot of fun.

Anyway, I've entered in a few of the contests. Two of them are closed and the other is still going.

My first story, Cyborg, I entered to the Beyond Time Science Fiction contest and took second place. It is found at this link: http://www.inkitt.com/stories/15856



My second story, the Forbidden Cellar, I entered into the End Game Horror contest. It's more of a thriller, but I thought that it would qualify. Anyway, they're judging that right now, so I don't know if I placed yet. It is found at this link: http://www.inkitt.com/stories/16921



My last story is actually just a beginning chapter of what might end up being a novel. For now, I'm calling it Beneath the Crimson Mountain. I entered it in the Hither and Thither Fantasy contest, which is still running. It currently has no reviews, and I would love some constructive criticism (and votes, if it is deemed worthy). It is found at this link: http://www.inkitt.com/stories/19400



Thank you so much! And if anyone has a story that they would like me to take a look at I would be happy to. Just comment below. I really like reviewing stuff. :)

Monday, August 10, 2015

Promoting Your Writing

Nowadays most writers can't just be writers. Now that the self-publishing industry is growing, authors are having to promote their own work, dividing their time between that and their passion. I think that it is extremely important to be able to promote your writing, and with the internet it is pretty easy. You just have to be willing to take the time to do so.

There are many social media sites that make promotion easy. Facebook, Twitter, Goodreads, etc. It is an easy way to gain followers and connect with fans. During a class at a Willamette Writer's meeting, someone told me a very interesting method for promoting yourself on social media. Some writers just promote and promote and promote and drive their followers crazy. When you only post things about yourself, it has that affect on people. She told me that you should divide your posts in thirds. One third of your posts should be promoting your work (naturally), one third should be used to promote someone else's work, and one third should be a post on something interesting that relates to your writing. (For example, if you are writing a story about saving the whales you might post statistics on how many whales are dying per year.) That way you're not turning people off to your work.

Another means of promotion is face to face. Going to writing classes or conferences -- or just anything involving other readers and writers -- is a good idea. I have gone to the Wordcrafters conference for the last two years and have found that face to face promotion is very affective. People remember you if you are willing to talk to them. And not just about your writing. Sometimes making contacts and meeting people is enough. Developing those relationships will help you make more important connections later on. Many writers are ready and willing to share advice and try to help you.

The last means I know of is simply getting your writing out there. A writer needs readers. And in order to get those, you must (obviously) give them something to read, whether you submit to magazines or use sites like Wattpad and Inkitt. Inkitt is a particular favorite of mine. It is a great place to get feedback on your writing. And a good place to give feedback of your own. I have found that reviewing other people's work is a great way to promote yourself...and to help out other writers. When you are willing to give of some of your time others are more willing to give you some of theirs.

Any other ways to promote yourself? Please comment below!

Monday, June 29, 2015

Why do we write?

When I tell someone that I'm a writer, most people frown at me and say, "Wuh?". Others criticize the amount of time that I spend on my laptop (which is probably legitimate). It always leads me to the question: Why do I do what I do? Why do I write? Why do WE write?

Ever since creation, people have been writing, telling their stories in one way or another. Even when certain writers are outlawed or band from publishing their work, there are still writers. Here are just a few of my thoughts on the subject.

We write to understand. Writers, or at least good writers, question, ponder, don't accept the easy answer. They explore the subject and look at both sides of the story. By writing they discover the truth, or what they believe to be the truth. When we write, it reveals things to us that we've never fully understood before. And the experience, if you've ever had it, is exhilarating. We are discovery junkies, like the early explorers. Writers have to question and challenge in order to add conflict and doubt to their story. I believe, personally, that writing can give you a better understanding of yourself, of others, and of the world around you.

We write to fight. It amazes me that throughout history people will write in order to take part in the battle going on around them. They publish themselves to get their opinion out, propaganda or not. Take for example Uncle Tom's Cabin by Harriet Beecher Stowe. Her writing affected the nation in many ways. So many people fight with a pen rather than a sword because they have leaned the power that words have. Sometimes words are more effective than a sword could ever be.

We write because we have to. I don't know about you, but if I didn't write I would have...problems. As a child, I always had an extremely active imagination. Lying in bed at night, I would make up stories in my head. A lot of time was spent daydreaming and roleplaying with neighbor kids. But that was never enough. I never found a satisfaction for my imagination until I finally started writing. It is a way to free ourselves, to empty ourselves. I think that (in a lot of cases) a writer becomes more observant of the world around them. Think about it. They must have very active minds all the time, searching for inspiration, watching people, listening to them talk, absorbing all that to use for writing. I'm not saying that writers are better. What I'm trying to say is that writing just has so many benefits. I think that it helps us in many ways. If used right, it teaches, it challenges, it trains.

And that's why I love it.

Any more thoughts? Please comment below!

I also wanted to say that I have submitted my writing to Inkitt for a Science Fiction story contest. You can read my story, Cyborg, for free at this link: http://www.inkitt.com/stories/15856   I would greatly appreciate a review or a vote.

Thanks so much!

 
I believe that the pen does too.


Monday, June 22, 2015

Writing Compelling Dialogue

   Dialogue can either make or break a story. So much character and plot is (or can be) conveyed in dialogue. It is a critical point in your writing. And it is one that I struggled with for a long time. One of the main things I have learned as I wrote is that characters shouldn't stay silent. They need to interact. Put a group of people in a room and see how long it is before someone says something. It's just not natural for people to not interact unless there's some sort of tension between them. Dialogue opens a wonderful door for you -- as the writer -- to reveal who your character really is. Here are several tips that I have found useful in writing dialogue.

   Tags. Your use of tags is extremely important. I've been reading a book lately with some good dialogue but horrible tags. A few mild examples, "he said loudly", "she replied laughingly", or "they said quietly". I don't know about you, but this drives me absolutely crazy! It is weak writing. These could be replaced with "he shouted", "she laughed", and "they whispered". There are places for adverbs, but they are few and far between.

   Another thing that I have learned about tags is that they should be used -- mostly, of course -- for specifying who is talking, not HOW they are talking. The dialogue itself should convey what the character is feeling and how they are saying it. For example:

"I want you to leave now," he demanded.

"Leave! NOW!" he said.

The verb "demanded" is not necessary if I convey the same thing through the way a character says something.

   Character styles. Every character should speak in such a way that it reveals something about them. What I mean by that is that each character should have a pattern of speech. Some characters might be soft-spoken and non-confrontational while another might have bullets loaded into every word. Some characters might be very particular about grammar while another might say "yer" instead of "your". It's completely up to you. Stephen King demonstrated this in his book "Misery" with the character, Annie Wilkes. She used words like "cockadoodie" and "Mr. Smart Guy" and "oogy". Dialogue is a great tool for developing character. Don't neglect it!

   Make it realistic. Dialogue, like most things in your writing, should feel authentic and realistic, not strained and awkward. One of the greatest things that you can do in learning how to write dialogue is listen to people. Talk to people. Observe their speech patterns and your own. What distinguishes how they talk? How you do? There are lots of things to be learned in every day life, especially when it comes to character. We have millions of living examples all around us. We just need to lend our attention to them.

These are just a few things that I have observed about dialogue. Do you have anything to add? Comment and start a discussion!

Monday, June 1, 2015

To Outline, or Not to Outline?

I don't know about you, but I have always been a fly-by-the-seat-of-your-pants kind of person. When I first started writing, I just wrote. No plan in my mind. Just writing. I was that way for quite a while. In a short period of time, I wrote three first drafts of novels like that. The problem was, out of those three, only one seemed salvageable. The characters were wooden. The plot was deeply flawed. The writing itself wasn't that great -- or at least I didn't think it was.

I was determined to find the problem, if it was even a problem to begin with. Why was my production only sub-par? Well, NOW I know that it was simply my inexperience that caused the problem. But at the time I thought that the issue was that I never outlined. I'd heard about other authors outlining and doing character development before they even started writing.

Well, that's the problem! I need to outline first and develop my characters, then the first draft will end up being better!

Made sense to me. So, I started trying to outline before I even began writing. The moment inspiration struck, I dove into the character development. It was super fun! The characters were awesome! The plot was thrilling and flawless! (This is what was going through my mind. It probably wasn't true.) Then I finally came to the actual writing. I got about forty pages in and quit. It was dull. Boring. I already knew everything that was going to happen. Outlining took away the thrill of the discovery draft. I tried outlining another book before writing it and the same thing happened! All my inspiration was spent on getting ready to write, not the writing itself!

Stephen King makes the same point in his book, "On Writing". Outlining (and this only applies to some people) takes the joy out of the writing itself.

I had been going through a long dry spell where I just couldn't write, didn't know what to write, didn't want to start something else that I didn't think I would finish. But I finally came to this conclusion. And to test it, I started writing again without outlining. In a week, I wrote seventy pages! For me, outlining is a killer. The reason I really started in the first place was because I knew that other famous authors did it. So why not?

This may not apply to some of you. I know that outlining does work for others. But in my case, it stifles the creativity and discovery of the first draft.

Have anything to add? Comment or start a discussion!

Tuesday, May 19, 2015

Why you need an editor

No matter who you are, whether you've had experience with self-editing or not, I believe that you need an editor. I have found them to be the most helpful resources that you can have as a writer. The reasons may be obvious, but sometimes they aren't.


  1. Outside perspective.
"That doesn't make sense to me."
"What do you mean? I explained it back on page 51!"
"But it didn't make sense back there either!"
   So often, we as writers take pride in our work, and that's the way it's supposed to be. Don't get me wrong. But because of that we often overlook the flaws in our work. Everything is in our head, so what happens in the book makes sense to us. However readers only have the information that you give them through the writing, and a lot of times we leave things out. The reader knows it when something is missing in the writing. If it doesn't make sense to them -- even if it does to you -- it likely means that you need to put more of the information in your head into your manuscript. This happens to me all the time. And that's part of why I think we need editors. They see things that we can't as the writer.

   2. Idea generating.
Since our readers have that outside perspective, they often find ways to improve the writing that we won't think of on our own. This doesn't mean that we have to do everything they tell us, but we should at LEAST consider what they have to say. I have found that sometimes even little things that my editors say can produce great ideas on how to improve the story. One sentence can become a scene. One blurb can add a chapter. That's the joy of being a writer, isn't it. We especially need these pushes when we are drained out of ideas concerning a particular story. This happens to me often, and the inspiration usually strikes when I'm having someone else read my story.

   3. Identifying interests.
As a writer, you have a choice to make. Write what you want to write...or write what you think the reader wants you to write. While I believe that we should write for ourselves, we should also keep the others in mind. When we let someone else read our work, we have an opportunity to see what snags our readers and what turns them off. This gives us a chance to improve in order to draw more readers. Whenever someone reads a bit of my manuscript, I always fire a barrage of questions at them. "What did you think about so-and-so?" "Do you think their character was consistent?" "What part of this story did you like best?" "What part did you lose interest in?" There's something to be said for engineering your writing to best suit your readers.

These are just my opinions. If you have anything that you'd like to share, I invite you to comment below. I just know that without my editors (among them are my parents and grandpa), I wouldn't be near as good a writer. (Thanks, guys! You're awesome!) So I would encourage you, if you don't have an editor, find one. Even if it is just a family member. It is a GREAT learning experience!

Tuesday, May 5, 2015

Describing Characters

One of my favorite parts about writing is creating the characters. From deciding how they look to how they act is always just an adventure for me. However, I tend to have a harder time describing what they look like than what they do. There are some tricks to avoiding stereotypical descriptions and having really unique characters.

1. What you describe. A lot of times a writer comes to the part where they must describe their character, and they dawdle around until they finally jot "He was a handsome man with blue eyes and blond hair." *Zzzz....* There are millions of people in the world that have blue eyes and blond hair! We need more than that to get a picture of this person! Each description should be unique and bring to life certain quirks about the way that character looks. I loved the very first description of Four in Divergent.

Page 59: "He" is the one attached to the hand I grabbed. He has a spare upper lip and a full lower lip. His eyes are so deep-set that his eyelashes touch the skin under his eyebrows, and they are dark blue, a dreaming, sleeping, waiting color.

I don't know about you, but that was enough to give me a pretty good first look at this character, and Veronica Roth didn't even go into hair color or body type. I believe the trick is using the most powerful descriptions you can, in the shortest amount of time.

Here is a description from my book: His hood and mask fell during the scuffle, revealing the young man's pallid, angular face. His breaths are long and furious. He appears to be in his late teens, perhaps a couple years older than myself. A mess of unevenly-cut black hair falls across his face but fails to hide his eyes. His eyes! A deep shade of violet, almost glowing in the shadows; they look warm against his cold sharp features. "Are you finished?" his lips twist. He would be attractive if not for that sneer.

Now, this description goes into a little more detail than the last one, and it's probably not as concise as it could be. But you get a pretty good idea of what this guy looks like. Cocky. Mysterious. And then there's those glowing eyes... What's up with that? The description is meant to make you realize that this dude isn't normal.

2. Don't clutter your writing. Another thing about writing descriptions is I CAN'T STAND IT when it takes half a page to describe something. We get it. She's pretty. If it takes half a page to describe a character, then the writer could be writing a lot more concisely. I think it's better to be short and powerful when it comes to descriptions. And another thing is that you don't have to describe everything about that character in one place. Feed your readers little nuggets of information about their appearance and quirks. They'll catch on. Information dumps can work, but they often slow the pace of your writing.

3. Have a picture in your head. In order to plant a picture of your character in your reader's mind, you must have that picture in your own mind first. You can write a willy-nilly description and go back to fix it later, but make sure that you have that picture in your head. In order to evoke something on the reader, you must know what you are trying to evoke. If you are struggling with coming up with a character description, I would suggest either sitting down and writing about that character until it becomes clear or look at pictures on the internet to come up with ideas.

A very helpful exercise I have used is taking a picture of a person, and describing them as best I could. Then I would write different descriptions of the same picture according to the mood I wanted to convey.

These are just a few tips that I would suggest. This is still an area that I struggle with myself. I wish you luck in creating your characters! :)

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